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Re: “Party 2 Nite. R U Going?

It doesn't take a Pulitzer Prize to tell how journalistically-lacking this article is. First, the fact that teenagers consume alcohol at parties and that drunkeness often leads to belligerence, sexuality and idiotic stuff like theft is not newsworthy. Second, the alarmist, sensationalist portrayal of teenage life makes head-scratching generalizations and implications about an enitre generation of well-connected teenagers. Third, the author uses tons of colloquial expressions, even when she's not quoting anyone. If she meant for the article to be taken seriously, why on earth would she write stuff like, "When young strangers congregate, gnarly shit can happen." This sentence, apparently the thesis of the article, is not how a Bay Area teenager would speak, let alone how published journalist should write. Lastly, the use of fake names ruins the journalistic merit in the article. For all the average reader knows, those quoted in the article are teachers, eight-year-olds or entirely imaginary.

My high school paper covered partying a couple of years ago. If anyone at the East Bay Express read our articles (written by high school students), they would probably be ashamed of this shoddy coverage of the serious issue at hand. Admitedly, no one has been stabbed at our parties, but this article was centered on Berkeley High, and the stabbing occured at a party with very few BHS kids in attendance. We were able to get high school students to go on record with real names and describe their expriences, including their own alcohol use. This lent a great deal of credibility to the stories that this article lacks in its use of fake names.

The writer should have done her homework on this one. She should have found real people to give her real information with real names, then she should have presented it in a matter-of-fact way without the cutesy language (even outside of quotes) and without the clear intent of persuading the reader that parties are bad and dangerous and that all who attend them are in immense peril. Her choice of party-profiling is clearly slanted toward the negative aspects, painting her work as more of an anti-party editorial. Could she not profile even one peaceful party? Does she mean to imply by this gaping absence that such parties don't exist? Once again, I would urge this journalist to be more dilligent in her pursuit of the story because I'm not sure she got it right this time.

-tunefulone@hotmail.com

Posted by Bob on 01/19/2008 at 12:07 PM

Re: “Party 2 Nite. R U Going?

It doesn't take a Pulitzer Prize to tell how journalistically awful this article is. First, the fact that teenagers consume alcohol at parties and that drunkeness often leads to belligerence, sexuality and idiotic stuff like theft is completely non-newsworthy. Second, the alarmist, sensationalist portrayal of teenage life makes head-scratching generalizations and implications about an enitre generation of well-connected teenagers. Third, the author uses tons of colloquial expressions, even when she's not quoting anyone. If she meant for the article to be taken seriously, why on earth would she write stuff like "When young strangers congregate, gnarly shit can happen." This sentence, apparently the thesis of the article, is not even how a Bay Area teenager would speak, let alone how published journalist should write. Lastly, the use of fake names ruins any remaining journalistic merit in the article. For all the average reader knows, those quoted in the article are teachers, eight-year-olds or entirely imaginary.

My high school paper covered partying a couple of years ago. If anyone at the East Bay Express read our articles (written by high school students), they would probably be ashamed of this nonsense. Admitedly, no one has been stabbed at our parties, but this article was centered on Berkeley High, and the stabbing occured at a party with very few BHS kids in attendance (despite the implication of the article). We were able to get high school students to go on record with real names and describe their expriences, including their own alcohol use. This lent a great deal of credibility to the stories that this article lacks in its use of fake names.

The writer should have done her homework on this one. She should have found real people to give her real information with real names, then she should have presented it in a matter-of-fact way without the cutesy language (even outside of quotes) and without the clear intent of persuading the reader that parties are bad and dangerous and that all who attend them are in immense peril. Her choice of party-profiling is clearly slanted toward the negative aspects, painting her work as more of an anti-party editorial. Could she not profile even one peaceful party? Does she mean to imply by this gaping absence that such parties don't exist? Once again, I would urge this journalist to do her homework and this publication to have higher standards for its content.

-tunefulone@hotmail.com

Posted by Bob on 01/19/2008 at 11:08 AM

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