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Re: “Bar Dogwood and the Importance of Being Earnest

Perhaps this article is a bit sardonic in tone, but it remains terribly well written, at least devoid of glaring logical fallacies, which is more than can be said for gp's scathing comment and subsequent review. I'm sorry to dissect this as if I were explaining basic english to a child but it seems necessary: Firstly, the term "a breath of fresh air" is used to describe a contrast between two things, in your context, where you literally said "Bar Dogwood is a breath of fresh air in downtown Oakland which is populated by the biggest artist community in the bay area and is experiencing and urban revival" you are implying that "Bar Dogwood" is a relief or an escape from the artist community and urban revival. I don't think this is what you meant to do. Secondly, to offer that somewhere is "bohemian" and then support that with how great their martinis are, it just doesnt really work. Especially when they've already been established as a bit pricy. Thirdly, the "touches of elegance" from what I've ascertained do not sound the least bit "simple". Fourthly, "The drinks, the bartenders and the ambiance is all Oakland" is in stark contrast with your opening claim that this place is "a breath of fresh air". Lastly, if you were attempting to establish the atmosphere as unpretentious by name-dropping some of the most pretentious venues in Oakland, well, at least there you succeeded. This was just a cursory review of the most glaring writing problems riddled within those 5 sentences (talk about convoluted writing!), there were many more, but I am trying to keep this terse. My point is, adherence to the formal constructs of the English language may not be your thing, but it certainly is Cushing's,and you'd do well to recognize the swag of a real boss before you write such a scathing meta-review.

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Posted by Hypastrophe on 09/08/2011 at 1:04 PM

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